DISQUS

justindz · 7 months ago

I like this one. Very tangible. One suggestion: instead of using the word "beauty" maybe just talk about the seeds or bits or whatever flowing away directly and let the beauty be in the imagery. Might add some more depth.

mXe · 7 months ago

Thank you. I see what you mean there, but the phrase beauty isn't meant so much to refer to the pieces or even the flower itself, but rather, to biological functioning. I mean, you crush a flower, it dies. Haha. The loss of beauty was a metaphor for the loss of life, and if I were to just come out and say it, I don't think it would just be the same.